The little blue penguin

This is a piece of writing I have been working on for a week the goal was to make It
really descriptive. The little blue penguin is my writing but if you go down to the
bottom there is an example. The words I changed or added are in orange.

My planning.

Number small little feet / tiny

One penguin

Bright coloured penguin lit up

Cold water/freezing

Running away from the water/sprinting

                       The little blue penguin

A beautiful sunny day not a dark cloud in the sky crystal clear water the perfect  day for a
swim a tiny blue penguin Named Jazmyn thought. But little did she know a ugly brown
spotted seal Named Izaak was thinking the same thing to. Into the chilly water they went
soon after they got in the seal spotted the penguin with his to beady little eyes. I could do
for a snack he thought. He chased the little blue penguin. The penguin ran so fast she
could run on water spriting flipper after flipper safely onto land. You got away this
time but I will get you next time he shouted out. Jazmyn laid on the sand for a wile
catching her breath. Then she heard it the cheers of the other penguins you did it you
out ran the ugly brown seal well done Jazmyn. From that day ford she was famous
and rich known as the world's fastest penguin.

 Making it more exciting to hook the reader in and make them keep reading.

Once I saw him I knew… He was small,fragile and skinny with one foot amputated .
Just standing on 3  feet keeping his balance gazing at me for awhile and I could tell  he
remembered me my long lost dog.